Yup it's a totally new game! For a change I can even point to what inspired me Beach Angels over on TF Games. Now don't get me wrong it's a fine game but it just doesn't have enough plot or story for me, so I decided to create a game based on the Holiday theme that does. I think it's a sign of a writer of any type that when they see something they think they could do differently, not necessarily better, they go out there and do it.
So just for my little blog followers here's the start of the game that includes the entire transformation sequence and most of the necessary description around all the items and locations. I even have the whole game plotted out, all those decision you make will have an effect on the second part of the game. But for now I'm putting the game to one side, why you ask? Well because I promised I'd work on finishing Tiresias, twisted logic I know but that's just how me little brain works.
I'd love any comments and feedback on Fallin', the plan is to post it up on TF in week or two, once I work out any bugs or typos.
Nice little demo :D
ReplyDeleteHm, well, I was sorta hoping the different choices would lead to girls with different looks... being the same girl likely makes life easier for you but...it just might make more sense if your answer to the Old Woman determines your eventual fate.
ReplyDeleteI hope you don't think I'm mean enough to go through all those questions for no reason! ;)
DeleteThey mainly play out in the second half of the game, determining who you can pick and what you can do with them. I've already got enough to work out with multiple endings, go gentle on me :D.
First of all, I'm happy to see something new from you, Nandi! I had the same feeling about Beach Angels and I'm thrilled someone like you is taking a turn on the theme. Like Vengeance I was hoping for different TFs influenced by the initial choices but it's alright as it is. There aren't enough ethnic girls in TF games anyway ;)
ReplyDeleteSo, since you were so kind to give the demo to your blog readers first I feel like I should give a little something back. So here is a list of all the typos I found so far. Be warned - they are quite a few. Also, I'm not a native speaker so if I messed something up just ignore it. Okay, so here we go:
Intro:
"It started politely enough with her asking about you and your holiday, but as the conversation progressed it took and stranger and darker turn."
Should be "took a stranger and darker turn".
"And pass that I’m just looking for just some amazing sex.”
Maybe remove one "just" and shouldn't it be "past" instead of "pass"?
"'Well that nice'. She replied..."
Should be "that's nice", also not sure about the punctuation.
"How did you miss all that it’ not like the conversation was that enthralling…"
Should be "it's".
Player Examine (pre-TF):
"You are Jack Williams a 30 something man who about to start the holiday of a lifetime."
Should be "who is".
"...and whilst you’re not in the best of shape you’re 150 lbs looks pretty good on your 5’7” frame."
Should be "your 150 lbs", too, I think.
Show Passport to Controller:
"As you lean in take a closer look at the picture, and to try to take work out exactly what he’s talking about, when you catch your reflection in the glass."
There are several things a bit off in this sentence. I'm not sure about the best correction.
"You hair has also grow out, becoming a mass of brown hair."
Should be "grown out".
"...barely contained within the shirt you stated the flight with."
Should be "the shirt you started the flight with".
"Almost out of habit you have a quick feel to see you’ve still got you cock..."
Should be "your cock".
"This must have something to do with that old woman, she’s out some curse on you..."
This should probably be "she's put some curse on you".
"...you have a note on you that explain about the changes your going through..."
Should be "that explains about the changes you're going through".
"But should you give in to changes?"
I think there's a "the" missing here.
Showing the note to the Controller:
"Despite yourself you feel a little proud at how impress her is with your newfound female whiles."
Should be "impressed".
"No wait that not your name, is it?"
Should be "that's not..."
Player Examine (mid-TF):
"Well you’re day certainly go weirder..."
Should be "your day... got weirder".
"You can still see the feature you had as a man but they’ve soften considerably into a much more feminine form."
Should be "features" and "softened".
"You’ve not lost any height ever your still around 5’7”, though you’ve lost a lot of weight you’d figure you’re around 20 lbs."
Should be "you're still". Not sure if the "ever" fits in there. Also, I think 20 lbs is a little on the light side. You probably mean 120 lbs? ;)
"...but you’d guess at around a handful your packing C-cups. "
Should be "you're packing C-cups".
"You’ve also got a sharply womanly figure..."
I think you mean a "shapely" figure.
Typo Report Part 2:
ReplyDeleteLook for Luggage:
"At this point you looking for any positive you can, and the only thing you think off is that at least you have all you clothes to wear."
Should be "you're looking" and "your clothes to wear". Also, I think "you can think of" would be better.
Take Luggage:
"Wait you not anywhere near that size."
Should be "you're not".
"Suspecting what about to happen your close up the case..."
Should be "what's about to happen you close".
"Looking on the mirror you see that you shirt is struggling..."
Should be "your shirt" and, I think, "looking in the mirror".
"...whilst still retaining the same high."
Should be "height".
"For it seems that you now wearing a pair of high heels on which you’ve been happily walking ion for the last few second."
Should be "you're now wearing", "walking on" and "few seconds".
"...all of which have seemed too shifted to your shoes."
I think it should be "seem to have shifted" instead.
"Well there no way you are going outside without anything on your feet..."
Should be "there's no way".
Stepping Outside:
"So it’s a bit of a shock we you step out into bright sunlight, and you without a pair of sunglasses to shield your eyes."
Should be "when you step" and maybe "and you're without..."
"As you do you notice you pale skin is darkening..."
Should be "your pale skin".
"...and more than that your now totally unrecognizable to yourself."
Should be "you're now".
"...you defiantly look like more of a Hope than a Jackie."
Should be "definitely".
Player Examine (post-TF):
"You know you use to be a man called Jack William..."
Should be "Williams".
In the second paragraph the first comma should be a period, I think.
"...a striking feature that suggest an African-American heritage."
Should be "that suggests".
"Even you once brown hair is a now black."
Should "your once brown..."
"Only your eye still the same brown color..."
There's an "is" missing here.
"...and you now weight about 120 lbs..."
Should be "weigh".
"You’re aforementioned breasts verge on the impractical..."
Should be "Your..."
"It becoming harder to remember that you still possess a cock..."
Should be "It's..."
Hail a Cab:
"You go through the process of getting a taxi, strongly comfortable..."
I think you mean "uncomfortable".
"...whilst the driver put your bag in the trunk."
Should be "puts".
"...your final piece of your former live as a man shrinks and transform itself..."
Should be "life" and "transforms".
"...what must he think you doing back here..."
Should be "you're doing".
"It’s a very long a frustrating journey to the hotel were you staying."
Should be "where you are staying".
"You are defiantly going to have a do something about this..."
Again, this should probably be "definitely".
I'm embarrassed that you're grasp of English is so much better than mine, and I meant to be the native English speaker :(. Anyhow thanks for the spell checking.
DeleteI'm not totally opposed to having different forms, I was very tempted to do a version with just Bailey Jay all the through (she's the first part of transformation). Let's see if I can finish the whole plot through (for a change ;)) then we can look at alternative forms.
Damn, I didn't mean to make you feel bad! No need to be embarrassed, really! I don't know if it's any consolation but two of my grandparents were English teachers so maybe I can count as a "semi-native" speaker. ;)
DeleteI'm all for a Bailey Jay path - I almost wanted to mention this in my first post (but then it was so long already...) I was happily surprised to see her used as a model even though I feared that it would only be temporary (for obvious reasons ;)).
But as you said - finish what you have planned first and then see about adding stuff. That is... once you have *cough* finished the next Tiresias episode... ;)
I must admit the idea of Bailey Jay with G-cups is...
ReplyDeleteyeah... that's awesome.
Weird thing is that the sequence wasn't originally planned, but I decided a middle image between the two so decided to go for the BE instead.
DeletePart of me wishes I had the photomanip skills to provide suitable images. But if I did I probably would write the text the way I do...
NendiBear posted a new game? *Dancing on the tables*
ReplyDeleteI thought the same as you about beach angels so I'm looking forward to trying this.
I know I am very late to the party on this one, but I had to comment on this...a game where the primary tranformation is WM to BF (and not just as a game over) is the game for which I have waited a long time! Nandi, I realize you have a lot of projects, but I am bursting with anticipation for more of this one! <3 <3 <3
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